By FisKyl
Summertime fun
Ready to run
Into the pool
To have some fun
Summer time camping
Out we go to do some tramping
Summertime feast
Put on the barbecue
So we can eat eat eat
Summertime celebration
Ready to make a family creation
Run run
Lets have some fun
In the great deep down under
Having summer time wonder
Holiday beach
By AndTeg
Holiday beach
waiting in the water
we surf in it
we jump in it
sometimes we play in it
all summer long
Soccer
By AndTeg
Soccer
ball flying
grass ripping
legs hurting
people cheering
yea!
we got a goal
starting again
to get another goal
ball spinning
people cheering
children screaming
people sweating
adults yakking
out of bounds!
Octopoems
Dragons
By HilSam
A dragon is purple
They are summer
Up in the sky
They are warm
A skin coat
Flame coloured bean bag
Jane And The Dragon
Flame Grilled Pork
Glenview Kid
By Hilsam
A Glenview Kid is green
They are Spring
Glenview School !
Sunny
School Uniform
Teacher Chair
Be Our Best Movie
Fish and Chips
Witches
By HilSam
Witches are Black
They are Winter
Witch's lair
Thunder and Lighting
Pointy Hat
Potions
Narnia - The Lion The Witch And The Wardrobe
Magic Potion
PoliceMan
By MosSam
A Police Man is blue
He is springtime
In a car
He is cloudy
He is a hat
Seat in the car
PoliceTen Seven
A Big Donut
Glenview Kids by ChaIsa
Green and Gold
SpringTime
In the Class
Hot Sunny
Summer Clothes
Awesoms tables and chairs
The cool Moviemaker
YummyFruit!
Summer by Booros
Children playing sport,
The sunny sun is shining,
(octopoem)
A Fireman by HedChl
A Fireman is red
He is Autumn
In a Firetruck
In a tall building
He is sunny
A yellow hat a red shirt and pants
He is an addvert
Roasted healthy vegetables.
Summer Holidays By BeaSav
Holidays with friends,
In the middle of the pool,
We swam in it,
Ran in it,
Sometimes we eat ham in it,
All summer long.
By some of the Young Poets of Room1
1 comment:
FisKyl I really like your poem. I hadn't seen this one before! Room 1 are becoming prolific poetry writers this Term. I wonder whether it might be better to make the title bolder, and add the poet (you) under the title, rather than at the bottom (where it gets a bit confused with the next poem). I also wonder whether your poem is meant to have verses? You have used the poem model well, and shown good understanding of the line pattern. WELL DONE.
Did you also write the Holiday Beach poem FisKyl? It needs a title (and author). Good recognition of pattern also shown here.
AndTeg - the wonderful words in your poem create an exciting picture in my head - I feel like I am at the game! (I hope I am not out of bounds!) Your poem needs a title, and perhaps your name as the poet needs to go at the top. I am please you worked with an expert blogger to publish this wonderful work (thanks MosSam).
Maybe we should be searching for some online childrens poetry websites to further publish some of your excellent writing Room 1?
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